IELTS Writing-Task 1

 2025.06.11

The chart gives information about that people's habits were buying and drinking coffee or tea in Sydney, Melbourne, Adelaide and Hobart in previous a month.

Overall, the largest percentage of people bought coffee or tea at a cafe in four cities except Adelaide in previous a month, while it came two to buy fresh coffee in Adelaide.

Three fifths of people in Melbourne, Hobart and Sydney have bought coffee or tea at a cafe in previous a month, while people from Brisbane and Adelaide have done that around 55% and 50% respectively. Additionally, the percentage of people that have bought instant coffee in Brisbane and Adelaide was over a half. The other cities have done that which was over 45%.

There was the smallest proportion of people in five cities that have bought  fresh coffee in previous a month. Two fifths of people in Sydney and Melbourne have bought fresh coffee. Additionally, people from Hobart, Adelaide and Brisbane have done that which was around a third.

Revision one 

The chart gives information about people's buying and drinking coffee and tea habits in Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide and Hobart in Australia in the previous month.

Overall, the largest percentage of people bought coffee or tea at a cafe in four cities except Adelaide, while buying fresh coffee was more popular in Adelaide.

Around three fifths of people in Melbourne, Hobart and Sydney have bought coffee or tea at a cafe in the previous month, while around 55% and 50% respectively. Additionally, the percentage of people that have bought instant coffee in Brisbane and Adelaide was over a half. Over 45% of people from other cities have done that. 

The smallest proportion of people in the five cities have bought fresh coffee in this time period. Two fifths of people in Sydney and Melbourne have bought fresh coffee. Additionally, around a third of people from Hobart, Adelaide and Brisbane have done that.

數據清楚寫出來

✅ Around 55% of people in Brisbane and 50% in Adelaide bought instant coffee.

避免模糊的代詞：

✅ bought instant coffee / visited a cafe

時態統一，建議用過去式或過去完成式來描述上個月

增加語句多樣性：

使用 like, compared to, was the least popular, stood at 58%, etc.

Revision two

The chart gives information about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide and Hobart in Australia in the previous month.

Overall, the largest percentage of people bought coffee or tea at a cafe in four cities except Adelaide, while buying fresh coffee was more popular in Adelaide.

previous adj.